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Year 3 Dining Hall Description

In English this week Year 3 have been describing the dining hall. We took our inspiration from J.K.Rowling’s description in the first Harry Potter book of ‘The Great Hall’.

We were looking at using adjectives, simile, alliteration and a range of sentence openers.

Below is a description that we worked on together.

The Holme Grange Dining Hall

When I walked into the gigantic Dining Hall, to my right were pictures of beautiful trees. It made me feel as if I was still in our enchanting Forest School. Immediately, the smell of delicious chocolate brownies slapped the inside of my nostrils, making my mouth begin to water. On the menu was the most irresistible food I had ever seen. It made my tummy start to rumble like an earthquake was about to occur. As I looked up, amazing Azdin suddenly appeared placing scrumptious fish and chips gently on the steaming hot plate. When I approached the front of the queue the lovely ladies plopped the oozing, cheesy pasta on my perfect plate. Staring to my left I saw my friends waving, giggling and calling my name. Meanwhile, two strict teachers were storming across the room telling children to be quiet. I sat down and had a mouthful of my fabulous food and it made me feel as if I was going to faint.

What are your favourite parts? Is there anything you would change to make these better?

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6 comments

  • Arjun Tahiliani · September 30, 2017 at 5:09 pm

    I liked the line ‘the smell of delicious chocolate brownies slapped the inside of my nostrils ‘.

    I would like to improve by adding adjectives to describe my friends ‘ cheerful and awesome friends waving, giggling and calling my name ‘.

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  • Fiona Kelly · September 30, 2017 at 7:44 pm

    Fabulous description. Inspired!
    Fiona Kelly

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  • Caitlyn Ledger · October 1, 2017 at 5:34 pm

    My favourite part is the smell of delicious chocolate brownies slapped the inside of my nostrils.

    I would change it to read scrumptious fishy fish and chips

    Caitlyn

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  • Lara · October 15, 2017 at 12:45 pm

    My favourite part is ‘Immediately, the smell of delicious chocolate brownies slapped the inside of my nostrils, making my mouth begin to water’.

    I would like to add some adjectives: ‘Meanwhile, two strict teachers were storming across the room telling the noisy and naughty children to be quiet.

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  • manish · November 23, 2017 at 7:47 pm

    I learnt that Khufu was a nice and kind ruler.

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  • manish · November 23, 2017 at 7:56 pm

    I love the beginning which is “When I entered the gigantic dining hall to my right, there were pictures of beautiful trees. It made me feel as if I was still in an enchanting Forest School.”

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